Topic: a poem

brie !kGoudaMCFA started this discussion 9 years ago #62,108

I can't tell if the Earth is taupe or shimmering violet
All I know is that there's really no place just like it
Now I'm on Mars I can feel the distance in my bones
Breathing in the @MOSphere and I'm all alone

Would I like to go back? You know I would
If there were 20 billion fewer in my neighborhood
There's not much here but it's all for me
Just till my plot and wait for company

And chewing something
Just chewing something to pass the time
Get dressed up fancy and think I'm in the limelight
It's not delicious but so delightful
Awful translation
Better than nothing

Take it from me
There's nothing better

brie !kGoudaMCFA (OP) double-posted this 9 years ago, 1 minute later[^] [v] #782,473

lol didn't read

Saved you the effort.

pussymaster !DMk4c3ty22 joined in and replied with this 9 years ago, 8 hours later, 8 hours after the original post[^] [v] #782,572

"Would I like to go back? You know I would
If there were 20 billion fewer in my neighborhood"

I liked this line a lot, really emphasized the idea of being an outsider in a community using the word neighborhood, it was also poetically very good.

I like your poem. Probably meant to be a shitpost, but I thought it was good.