Topic: i'm writing a short story
hamfist !0Ynig1RSDc started this discussion 10 years ago #51,998
it's called second lives and it's about a guy (the protag), a failed chess prodigy, and a furry all playing second life at an internet cafe. does this sound like a decent premise? i'm not trying to make it super artsy or "alt". i just want to write like don delillo. pic unrelatedFake anon !ZkUt8arUCU joined in and replied with this 10 years ago, 14 minutes later[^] [v] #676,090
Sounds largely autobiographical.
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hamfist !0Ynig1RSDc (OP) replied with this 10 years ago, 2 minutes later, 17 minutes after the original post[^] [v] #676,091
Anonymous C joined in and replied with this 10 years ago, 12 minutes later, 29 minutes after the original post[^] [v] #676,097
Sounds terribly patrician...
kook !!mCVqftDha joined in and replied with this 10 years ago, 6 minutes later, 36 minutes after the original post[^] [v] #676,101
What are the problems that motivate the characters?
hamfist !0Ynig1RSDc (OP) replied with this 10 years ago, 3 minutes later, 40 minutes after the original post[^] [v] #676,102
@previous (kook !!mCVqftDha)
they're all looking for some kind of escapism, and some of the plot revolves around them taking a "virtual road trip" in which they log onto a second life server with a car and traverse the virtual landscape. i'm going to have to add another element though because 3 guys looking at a screen isn't terribly compelling
they're all looking for some kind of escapism, and some of the plot revolves around them taking a "virtual road trip" in which they log onto a second life server with a car and traverse the virtual landscape. i'm going to have to add another element though because 3 guys looking at a screen isn't terribly compelling
kook !!mCVqftDha replied with this 10 years ago, 29 minutes later, 1 hour after the original post[^] [v] #676,107
Antikhristos !M6R0eWkIpk joined in and replied with this 10 years ago, 6 hours later, 7 hours after the original post[^] [v] #676,196
@676,102 (hamfist !0Ynig1RSDc)
You have enough of an idea to get started. VR is just a different form of escapism in the end, much like drugs, religion, or even the internet for instance.
Maybe consider what they're escaping from as individuals. That might help you flesh it out some and drive the story.
Then when you get to the conclusion you might consider was the escapism useful or did it make things worse for the individuals? Did it resolve anything?
Pretty much all stories follow a very basic formula, you've got a large part of it figured out, you just need to ruminate a bit more.
Or just start writing and see where it goes, if you're serious about it, there are bound to be revisions.
Maybe ask yourself what you're trying to tell your audience with the story.
You have enough of an idea to get started. VR is just a different form of escapism in the end, much like drugs, religion, or even the internet for instance.
Maybe consider what they're escaping from as individuals. That might help you flesh it out some and drive the story.
Then when you get to the conclusion you might consider was the escapism useful or did it make things worse for the individuals? Did it resolve anything?
Pretty much all stories follow a very basic formula, you've got a large part of it figured out, you just need to ruminate a bit more.
Or just start writing and see where it goes, if you're serious about it, there are bound to be revisions.
Maybe ask yourself what you're trying to tell your audience with the story.
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