Topic: I am a targeted individual who has been raped and tortured for 12 years
Anonymous A started this discussion 2 years ago #112,906
I was first targeted by the government and private individuals in the year 2000 at the age of 7 years old. I have been harassed, tracked, wiretapped and monitored my entire life for no clear reason.I met with time travelers in the year 2000 who managed to bring information of the future back into the past and they confronted me about my actions and choices.
In 2011, I was first implanted with devices in my back, neck and anus that would rape me and torture me for close to 18 hours a day.
In 2015, despite having no schizophrenia in my family going back three generations, I was diagnosed with schizophrenia. The explanation for this is that I eventually figured out that I was injected with DNA altering technology to give me schizophrenia.
On October 26th of 2016, my wife Isabella Santiago, was sex trafficked by Mark Zuckerberg and the rape and torture from the implants intensified.
Since 2019, I have been privately investigating what happened to me, my wife and our families through Mark Zuckerberg's actions.
All of my evidence is available at johnclasheras.wordpress.com
I will answer any questions to the best of my ability and summarize what has happened to me.
Anonymous B joined in and replied with this 2 years ago, 8 minutes later[^] [v] #1,250,992
Do you find that narcotics help relieve anxiety when you entertain thoughts of your past experiences?
Anonymous A (OP) replied with this 2 years ago, 7 minutes later, 15 minutes after the original post[^] [v] #1,250,997
Fake anon !ZkUt8arUCU joined in and replied with this 2 years ago, 1 hour later, 1 hour after the original post[^] [v] #1,251,044
I believe the schizophrenia part but the rest seems implausible.
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Anonymous A (OP) replied with this 2 years ago, 20 minutes later, 1 hour after the original post[^] [v] #1,251,054
Anonymous A (OP) double-posted this 2 years ago, 1 minute later, 1 hour after the original post[^] [v] #1,251,055
I'm too strong Zuckerberg. I will survive and end you, Facebook and your empire.
I will have hundreds of billions of dollars to run Singularitarian Technologies Corporation and change the future of humanity forever.
You severely mis-underestimated your greatest enemy.
You may have done this to others but I will not concede.
If a civil war breaks out, I will come after you. I will find you and you will end
I will have hundreds of billions of dollars to run Singularitarian Technologies Corporation and change the future of humanity forever.
You severely mis-underestimated your greatest enemy.
You may have done this to others but I will not concede.
If a civil war breaks out, I will come after you. I will find you and you will end
Anonymous A (OP) triple-posted this 2 years ago, 1 minute later, 1 hour after the original post[^] [v] #1,251,057
They're using this as an opportunity to deprive me of my rights, freedom and pleasure to live a normal life for their own means of pleasuring themselves.
Satanists do this quite often. They physically, mentally and spiritually torture human beings for as long as possible to positively reinforce their decisions and actions in life.
Satanists will never be forgiven by God or myself.
It is just futility in motion.
Satanists do this quite often. They physically, mentally and spiritually torture human beings for as long as possible to positively reinforce their decisions and actions in life.
Satanists will never be forgiven by God or myself.
It is just futility in motion.
Anonymous A (OP) quadruple-posted this 2 years ago, 3 minutes later, 1 hour after the original post[^] [v] #1,251,059
Then, at that point, Facebook under the direction of Mark Zuckerberg bribed and corrupted the faculty at my dormitory to rape and torture me through non consensual implantation.
I have evidence for this going back to 2011.
I have evidence for this going back to 2011.
Anonymous A (OP) quintuple-posted this 2 years ago, 22 seconds later, 1 hour after the original post[^] [v] #1,251,060
Johnclasheras.wordpress.com
Here is all the evidence that you need.
Here is all the evidence that you need.
Anonymous A (OP) sextuple-posted this 2 years ago, 3 minutes later, 2 hours after the original post[^] [v] #1,251,062
They rented a home across my rented apartment at 213 Clark Place Elizabeth New Jersey that was not reported in the news or anywhere else that a major raid by the FBI, DEA and Elizabeth police was occurring.
I have proof of this highly atypical behavior is on my website at johnclasheras.wordpress.com
If you look at it then you'll find out.
I have proof of this highly atypical behavior is on my website at johnclasheras.wordpress.com
If you look at it then you'll find out.
Anonymous A (OP) septuple-posted this 2 years ago, 3 hours later, 5 hours after the original post[^] [v] #1,251,097
Anonymous D joined in and replied with this 2 years ago, 1 hour later, 6 hours after the original post[^] [v] #1,251,105
this is almost as good as timecube
Anonymous A (OP) replied with this 2 years ago, 3 hours later, 10 hours after the original post[^] [v] #1,251,167
@previous (D)
https://johnclasheras.wordpress.com/the-private-revelation-of-jesus-christ/
There is a picture of Isabella from 2016 in this post the website.
https://johnclasheras.wordpress.com/the-private-revelation-of-jesus-christ/
There is a picture of Isabella from 2016 in this post the website.
Anonymous A (OP) double-posted this 2 years ago, 2 minutes later, 10 hours after the original post[^] [v] #1,251,170
If you read my research I have proof of this.I am extremely capable. My IQ when last measured was between 132 - 160. I even scored 180 on some tests.
I don't rely on that but instead the substantive empirical evidence that can augment the claims of high IQ.
Anonymous E joined in and replied with this 2 years ago, 2 minutes later, 10 hours after the original post[^] [v] #1,251,173
Anonymous F joined in and replied with this 2 years ago, 13 seconds later, 10 hours after the original post[^] [v] #1,251,174
@1,251,170 (A)
Wow! An IQ of 180 is 1 in 20 million for the sample population.
Minichan really does have the brightest minds on the net.
Wow! An IQ of 180 is 1 in 20 million for the sample population.
Minichan really does have the brightest minds on the net.
Anonymous G joined in and replied with this 2 years ago, 1 minute later, 10 hours after the original post[^] [v] #1,251,177
Anonymous A (OP) replied with this 2 years ago, 2 minutes later, 10 hours after the original post[^] [v] #1,251,179
Per bitwise operation, exponential complexity is capped at approximately 34.55 exponentiations per variable and an intersective inclusivity between both variables not exceeding 66 exponentiations for either one or the other variable.
This value exponentially falls off with every increment of +2
Anonymous E replied with this 2 years ago, 1 minute later, 10 hours after the original post[^] [v] #1,251,180
@1,251,177 (G)
Does insanity include rabidly stalking someone's social media, and the very second that something is posted, rushing to post it on Minichan? Then I agree.
Does insanity include rabidly stalking someone's social media, and the very second that something is posted, rushing to post it on Minichan? Then I agree.
Anonymous A (OP) replied with this 2 years ago, 37 seconds later, 10 hours after the original post[^] [v] #1,251,182
Difference Ratio 34359738368 3.468085106 0 N/A UNDEFINED
Google Index 30,000,000,000,000
Google Index 30,000,000,000,000
Anonymous A (OP) double-posted this 2 years ago, 2 minutes later, 10 hours after the original post[^] [v] #1,251,183
2^n1 + 2^n2… == 25270000000
Polys1
25,270,000,000 2^n1 + 2^n2… == 25270000000
Difference Ratio 34359738368 3.468085106
Polys1
25,270,000,000 2^n1 + 2^n2… == 25270000000
Difference Ratio 34359738368 3.468085106
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Anonymous A (OP) triple-posted this 2 years ago, 1 minute later, 10 hours after the original post[^] [v] #1,251,184
N/A UNDEFINED
Anonymous H joined in and replied with this 2 years ago, 15 seconds later, 10 hours after the original post[^] [v] #1,251,185
Anonymous A (OP) replied with this 2 years ago, 45 seconds later, 10 hours after the original post[^] [v] #1,251,186
N/A UNDEFINED
Anonymous E replied with this 2 years ago, 27 seconds later, 10 hours after the original post[^] [v] #1,251,187
@1,251,185 (H)
That is not what I said. I said that you stalk social media and instantly post it here. It is You that are doing something insane.
That is not what I said. I said that you stalk social media and instantly post it here. It is You that are doing something insane.
Anonymous H replied with this 2 years ago, 1 minute later, 10 hours after the original post[^] [v] #1,251,188
@previous (E)
I didn't post anything from your social media, wherever it is, and if I did, why would it bother you?
I didn't post anything from your social media, wherever it is, and if I did, why would it bother you?
Anonymous A (OP) replied with this 2 years ago, 43 seconds later, 10 hours after the original post[^] [v] #1,251,189
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3 34.55670661 3 16 1 3 1579375000 1579375000
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7 34.5567066 7 256 0 7 98710937.5 98710937.5
8 34.55670661 8 512 0 8 49355468.75 49355468.75
9 34.55670655 9 1024 7 9 24677734.38 24677734.38
10 34.55670661 10 2048 0 10 12338867.19 12338867.19
11 34.55670638 11 4096 3 11 6169433.594 6169433.594
12 34.55670661 12 8192 4 12 3084716.797 3084716.797
13 34.55670568 13 16384 11 13 1542358.398 1542358.398
14 34.55670661 14 32768 0 14 771179.1992 771179.1992
15 34.55670287 15 65536 10 15 385589.5996 385589.5996
16 34.55670661 16 131072 0 16 192794.7998 192794.7998
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Anonymous A (OP) double-posted this 2 years ago, 54 seconds later, 10 hours after the original post[^] [v] #1,251,190
I would give you more notes, but I’m being raped and tortured by this implant. Here is some good proof for you as well that this implant does exist.Anonymous E replied with this 2 years ago, 8 minutes later, 10 hours after the original post[^] [v] #1,251,199
@1,251,188 (H)
You did. And really, it's the fact that you post it INSTANTLY that is the real clue lol. It means that you refresh my social media pages every second, day and night. There's no other way to do it.
You did. And really, it's the fact that you post it INSTANTLY that is the real clue lol. It means that you refresh my social media pages every second, day and night. There's no other way to do it.
Anonymous D replied with this 2 years ago, 8 minutes later, 10 hours after the original post[^] [v] #1,251,204
Anonymous E replied with this 2 years ago, 40 seconds later, 10 hours after the original post[^] [v] #1,251,205
@previous (D)
You mean the stalker? I am sure he sleeps a couple of hours a night, but is anxious to get back up to stalk social media.
You mean the stalker? I am sure he sleeps a couple of hours a night, but is anxious to get back up to stalk social media.
Anonymous D replied with this 2 years ago, 12 minutes later, 10 hours after the original post[^] [v] #1,251,209
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Fake anon !ZkUt8arUCU replied with this 2 years ago, 2 hours later, 19 hours after the original post[^] [v] #1,251,252
@previous (I)
@1,251,215 (E)
@1,251,214 (D)
There is an extremely unwell schizophrenic man having a mental breakdown in this thread, and your bickering managed to be so insane that he felt uncomfortable posting here and stopped.
@1,251,215 (E)
@1,251,214 (D)
There is an extremely unwell schizophrenic man having a mental breakdown in this thread, and your bickering managed to be so insane that he felt uncomfortable posting here and stopped.
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Anonymous J joined in and replied with this 2 years ago, 1 hour later, 20 hours after the original post[^] [v] #1,251,261
Anonymous A (OP) replied with this 2 years ago, 7 hours later, 1 day after the original post[^] [v] #1,251,400
I have a gun I have toilet paper
Anonymous A (OP) double-posted this 2 years ago, 4 minutes later, 1 day after the original post[^] [v] #1,251,401
shooting strategy is debatable as "Z-brg" is an unknown species hollow point like this one has a proven expansion when penetrating hard bone followed by flesh
Anonymous F replied with this 2 years ago, 34 seconds later, 1 day after the original post[^] [v] #1,251,402
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Anonymous A (OP) replied with this 2 years ago, 2 minutes later, 1 day after the original post[^] [v] #1,251,405
sometimes effectiveness is traded for more mobility and easy concealmenteven to be keistered if the situation demands it
Anonymous L joined in and replied with this 2 years ago, 13 hours later, 1 day after the original post[^] [v] #1,251,547
They're all as retarded as Christopher retard gillon lol
Anonymous L double-posted this 2 years ago, 2 minutes later, 1 day after the original post[^] [v] #1,251,549
@1,251,179 (A)
So you can transform yourself entirely-arithmetically...
Nah; I'm informed despite only being rote-mathematicized myself that's an IQ equivalent of maybe 92-vis-85. Fuck off Zucktard sympy.
Christopher retard gillon was exposed retarded, pseudo-autistic, a psychopath, pseudo-asperger, pseudo-transgender, pseudo-non-asperger, and in the prepositions of things, retarded, really, deeper a few more categories, and maybe, he can use double digits in power theory, or at least very long diggittals; he receives a shitty grade this year regardless for being a faget as we've gone Nigerian in the promotions this round.
So you can transform yourself entirely-arithmetically...
Nah; I'm informed despite only being rote-mathematicized myself that's an IQ equivalent of maybe 92-vis-85. Fuck off Zucktard sympy.
Christopher retard gillon was exposed retarded, pseudo-autistic, a psychopath, pseudo-asperger, pseudo-transgender, pseudo-non-asperger, and in the prepositions of things, retarded, really, deeper a few more categories, and maybe, he can use double digits in power theory, or at least very long diggittals; he receives a shitty grade this year regardless for being a faget as we've gone Nigerian in the promotions this round.
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dj coco nutty joined in and replied with this 2 years ago, 1 day later, 3 days after the original post[^] [v] #1,251,894
I love a good space opera and I think John Lasheras does, too. What he has produced here sadly falls short. I applaud his ambition and sense of scale, but this isn’t quite enough. The blueprint of a good idea needs a story to make the brickwork, interesting characters to skim over the rough surface and characters with engaging dialogue to wallpaper over the smooth surface. At this point, the importance of good honest editing to make sure the patter in the paper lines up and there aren’t any paste bubbles. Almost none of this happened during the creative process, perhaps homoeopathic doses of criticism.
The characters were described in a very formulaic way. As each character popped up, their height, hair and eye colour and, if we were lucky, perhaps a word or two about their general demeanour. This pattern reached its peak with the description of a Black General, strictly African-American because the narrative is in the US at this point. He was described as tall, with brown hair and eyes. Now it’s possible that uniform regulations might be relaxed in the near future, but I wouldn’t expect blue eyes and a pink hair rinse.
The next issue was the casual almost careless use of genocide. Early on in the story, a terrestrial race of intelligent reptilian creatures were discovered living under the Earth. The US President thought fighting the Annunaki and Reptilian races would split the military into fighting on two fronts, so decided to destroy the Reptilians absolutely. In context, the subterranean race is discovered and sentenced to death in a couple of pages. The actual war takes a few more pages to be waged, but that’s it. The Reptilians literally add nothing to the plot or overall story. You could argue perhaps that the discovery of this Reptilians race prompted Alvin to develop weapons and anthropomorphic A.I. units to wage the war but this only took Alvin a page of so. Realistically, a couple of months in the lab could have probably produced similar tech. I haven’t touched on Alvin’s rapid adoption of his new role of angel of death. The President told Alvin about the Reptilians and his plans to wipe them out within a paragraph and Alvin agreed to do it in the next one. I can’t imagine Steve Jobs or Steve Wozniak agreeing to wipe out a brand new race on a whim.
A quick note on my use of the term ‘pages’ throughout the review. I read this ebook on a Kindle which was a bit zoomed in. A page so described might be slightly more or less depending on your device settings.
The author’s use of time ‘misuse’ needs a mention. Throughout the story, time passes like no other novel I have ever read. Between the genocide and leading the human race, Alvin also effectively makes humanity immortal. As a result of this there are huge leaps of time I think the record was a billion and a half years in the pause between chapters. More usually, 65 thousand years was the typical interval. Alvin perfected the technology to move suns to keep Earth alive as its increasing series of suns burned out like night-lights at a summer barbecue. As a side effect of this, Alvin, now the emperor of the universe, seems to be devoting more of his tech to keeping the human race chronologically stagnant. Billions of years in the future Alvin tells his son to use his smart phone with built in GPS to find him in a public park. There is a strange little passage when Alvin and his second-in-command, in his evening job as jazz musician, enjoy a quick joint. This section is notable because the cannabis bud has the most vivid and detailed piece of description in the whole story. It might be as much as a whole page.
This anachronistic tech jars a bit. Along the way, Alvin has invented nanotech which is capable of altering humans and growing VR tech in the brain. Surely such devices could grow a tiny little navigation system? Why would you need a fancy future phone to prod with your boring old human basic fingers and point at your dull old animal eyes?
The next area to study is the Lasheras’ use of numbers. We touched upon this slightly with the passage of time but that is just the start. About 30% of the way through the story, the UK is invaded by a communist army of a billion soldiers. Allowing for some population growth, that still would mean roughly 10 soldiers for every British person on the isles. Is that how wars will be fought in the future? Blocking doorways and eating the country out of house and home?
One of my favourite bits of the story is during the takeover of the parliament. There are two characters who are named and executed. In the context, I assume they are political leaders, perhaps the Prime Minister? Who can tell? They are neither mentioned before or after their demise.
Another personal favourite use of numbers is when Alvin’s tower block is taken over by a hundred thousand communist troops. Assume a coach can carry 70 people. This invasion would have taken about 1400 coaches. Having been near the chaos of a football match trying to get 70 thousand people into one part of a city, this strikes me as impossible. I have struggled to organise 20 people to meet up in town and being moved to pull my hair out.
When Alvin works out how many spaceships Earth will need to beat the Annunaki, he gets a total of 300 million. Elsewhere in the story, he says a ship needs a minimum of 10 people to fly. I make that 3 American billion people to train up and build ships for them to fight with.
I haven’t mentioned yet smaller things like Alvin’s son self-diagnosing and curing his mental illness in three lines, never for it to have any effect on the plot in any way. I won’t mention Alvin’s attempts at writing poetry because everyone needs a hobby.
Towards the end of the story, with the Annunaki species wiped out and their client races imprisoned, Alvin takes a few years off and goes visiting Earth’s new planets. He is described as being shocked and surprised that the Annunaki didn’t like being imprisoned on their home planets for 65 thousand years. I imagine that even one of humanities casual genocides might have been a relief.
Herein lies the story’s biggest issue. Lasheras seems to have only a very limited grasp on other people’s wants and needs. I took to screen capping some of the dialogue because I wanted to do it justice. In a scene which is supposed to be moving and dramatic, Alvin has constructed a virtual reality program so he can travel back to talk with his father. Imagine 5 year-old Alvin hearing this from his digital daddy. ‘I know how much you wanted to come to the park and play today. We’re here Alvin. It’s Saturday. Enjoy yourself. Get some exercise. Meet some new kids today and behave yourself! Try not to hurt yourself okay?’
I’m not sure if humans have ever spoken like that. It’s like the author hasn’t heard a conversation or used words in any combination. There are other characters in the story but they are so slightly sketched out and limited that they hardly warrant a mention.
Have you ever tried a DIY project in an attempt to try something new? That is human nature. Many of us will have a mostly brown oil painting or a hung door with a triangular gap along the top edge? This is the feeling you get when reading this book. Lasheras is obviously an SF fan. It seems like he decided to give writing a really good go.
I think a good editor would have said to split this into a series of books and develop the better ideas a bit more. The secret underground species could have been developed. The A.I. warriors are possibly a book in their own. The Annunaki wars would probably have filled a couple more, too.
Going back to an earlier analogy, the bricks of good ideas were dumped in a bit of a heap instead of being arranged to make a nice building. It must be said that the review copy I read might have been an earlier draft with a missing paragraph or key phrase but this seems unlikely. This is not a book for fans of SF or space operas, possibly not for fans of words or humans neither. If you chose to read this book, I have great admiration for you.
The characters were described in a very formulaic way. As each character popped up, their height, hair and eye colour and, if we were lucky, perhaps a word or two about their general demeanour. This pattern reached its peak with the description of a Black General, strictly African-American because the narrative is in the US at this point. He was described as tall, with brown hair and eyes. Now it’s possible that uniform regulations might be relaxed in the near future, but I wouldn’t expect blue eyes and a pink hair rinse.
The next issue was the casual almost careless use of genocide. Early on in the story, a terrestrial race of intelligent reptilian creatures were discovered living under the Earth. The US President thought fighting the Annunaki and Reptilian races would split the military into fighting on two fronts, so decided to destroy the Reptilians absolutely. In context, the subterranean race is discovered and sentenced to death in a couple of pages. The actual war takes a few more pages to be waged, but that’s it. The Reptilians literally add nothing to the plot or overall story. You could argue perhaps that the discovery of this Reptilians race prompted Alvin to develop weapons and anthropomorphic A.I. units to wage the war but this only took Alvin a page of so. Realistically, a couple of months in the lab could have probably produced similar tech. I haven’t touched on Alvin’s rapid adoption of his new role of angel of death. The President told Alvin about the Reptilians and his plans to wipe them out within a paragraph and Alvin agreed to do it in the next one. I can’t imagine Steve Jobs or Steve Wozniak agreeing to wipe out a brand new race on a whim.
A quick note on my use of the term ‘pages’ throughout the review. I read this ebook on a Kindle which was a bit zoomed in. A page so described might be slightly more or less depending on your device settings.
The author’s use of time ‘misuse’ needs a mention. Throughout the story, time passes like no other novel I have ever read. Between the genocide and leading the human race, Alvin also effectively makes humanity immortal. As a result of this there are huge leaps of time I think the record was a billion and a half years in the pause between chapters. More usually, 65 thousand years was the typical interval. Alvin perfected the technology to move suns to keep Earth alive as its increasing series of suns burned out like night-lights at a summer barbecue. As a side effect of this, Alvin, now the emperor of the universe, seems to be devoting more of his tech to keeping the human race chronologically stagnant. Billions of years in the future Alvin tells his son to use his smart phone with built in GPS to find him in a public park. There is a strange little passage when Alvin and his second-in-command, in his evening job as jazz musician, enjoy a quick joint. This section is notable because the cannabis bud has the most vivid and detailed piece of description in the whole story. It might be as much as a whole page.
This anachronistic tech jars a bit. Along the way, Alvin has invented nanotech which is capable of altering humans and growing VR tech in the brain. Surely such devices could grow a tiny little navigation system? Why would you need a fancy future phone to prod with your boring old human basic fingers and point at your dull old animal eyes?
The next area to study is the Lasheras’ use of numbers. We touched upon this slightly with the passage of time but that is just the start. About 30% of the way through the story, the UK is invaded by a communist army of a billion soldiers. Allowing for some population growth, that still would mean roughly 10 soldiers for every British person on the isles. Is that how wars will be fought in the future? Blocking doorways and eating the country out of house and home?
One of my favourite bits of the story is during the takeover of the parliament. There are two characters who are named and executed. In the context, I assume they are political leaders, perhaps the Prime Minister? Who can tell? They are neither mentioned before or after their demise.
Another personal favourite use of numbers is when Alvin’s tower block is taken over by a hundred thousand communist troops. Assume a coach can carry 70 people. This invasion would have taken about 1400 coaches. Having been near the chaos of a football match trying to get 70 thousand people into one part of a city, this strikes me as impossible. I have struggled to organise 20 people to meet up in town and being moved to pull my hair out.
When Alvin works out how many spaceships Earth will need to beat the Annunaki, he gets a total of 300 million. Elsewhere in the story, he says a ship needs a minimum of 10 people to fly. I make that 3 American billion people to train up and build ships for them to fight with.
I haven’t mentioned yet smaller things like Alvin’s son self-diagnosing and curing his mental illness in three lines, never for it to have any effect on the plot in any way. I won’t mention Alvin’s attempts at writing poetry because everyone needs a hobby.
Towards the end of the story, with the Annunaki species wiped out and their client races imprisoned, Alvin takes a few years off and goes visiting Earth’s new planets. He is described as being shocked and surprised that the Annunaki didn’t like being imprisoned on their home planets for 65 thousand years. I imagine that even one of humanities casual genocides might have been a relief.
Herein lies the story’s biggest issue. Lasheras seems to have only a very limited grasp on other people’s wants and needs. I took to screen capping some of the dialogue because I wanted to do it justice. In a scene which is supposed to be moving and dramatic, Alvin has constructed a virtual reality program so he can travel back to talk with his father. Imagine 5 year-old Alvin hearing this from his digital daddy. ‘I know how much you wanted to come to the park and play today. We’re here Alvin. It’s Saturday. Enjoy yourself. Get some exercise. Meet some new kids today and behave yourself! Try not to hurt yourself okay?’
I’m not sure if humans have ever spoken like that. It’s like the author hasn’t heard a conversation or used words in any combination. There are other characters in the story but they are so slightly sketched out and limited that they hardly warrant a mention.
Have you ever tried a DIY project in an attempt to try something new? That is human nature. Many of us will have a mostly brown oil painting or a hung door with a triangular gap along the top edge? This is the feeling you get when reading this book. Lasheras is obviously an SF fan. It seems like he decided to give writing a really good go.
I think a good editor would have said to split this into a series of books and develop the better ideas a bit more. The secret underground species could have been developed. The A.I. warriors are possibly a book in their own. The Annunaki wars would probably have filled a couple more, too.
Going back to an earlier analogy, the bricks of good ideas were dumped in a bit of a heap instead of being arranged to make a nice building. It must be said that the review copy I read might have been an earlier draft with a missing paragraph or key phrase but this seems unlikely. This is not a book for fans of SF or space operas, possibly not for fans of words or humans neither. If you chose to read this book, I have great admiration for you.
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lol "do you have a girlfriend?"
"no, I actually have a sex-trafficked wife who's being held hostage in California"
"no, I actually have a sex-trafficked wife who's being held hostage in California"
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The pictures of bullets makes me think this thread has the chance of becoming newsworthy. So I thought I might as well post and become a footnote in whatever tragic ends this leads to.